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THE VALIARD MANSION - Chapter 1 by The-Ez THE VALIARD MANSION - Chapter 1 by The-Ez

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STORY SYNOPSIS
Set in 1888, The Valiard Mansion tells the story Ruth Rosewood, a middle-class Englishwoman who gets trapped inside a haunted house by a vengeful ghost.  Only one spell can set her free, and only three people believe she can still be saved—her childhood sweetheart, her best friend and her little brother. To find the spell, Theodore, Gangfield and Adam set off to traverse the dangerous past of an ancient magician, while Ruth must fight to keep her sanity in the all-consuming realm of the forgotten dead. 


Welcome to the first chapter of my illustrated novel, The Valiard Mansion! :D It's got romance, ghosts, magic and talking animals—basically all my favourite things—and it's suitable for all ages. :meow:

A new chapter is published every month or so in the format of a freely downloadable PDF. The large font size makes for easy reading on all monitors and mobile devices. Publication takes place here on deviantART as well as on the official Valiard website.

Visit www.TheValiardMansion.com/ to read the story and learn more about the characters!

:star: Any crits and comments are welcome. I'm still a newbie author and I want to learn as much as I can! Please don't hesitate to let me know what you think, okay! :w00t:

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CHAPTER 1 | >> CHAPTER 2 The Valiard Mansion - Chapter 2 by The-Ez
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DemonicAngelRampage Featured By Owner 2 days ago
This is absolutely amazing! I love your art style and your story. It's just amazing.
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FriesianKiss Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't understand how anyone could say Gangfield looks odd, he's absolutely gorgeous!  Love 
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey, we all have different tastes! :giggle: Ruth has her type, and her type happens to be tall and messy. :meow:

I'm super glad you like Gangfield, though, of course! :la: BIG HUGS FOR YOU!!! :glomp: :star:
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FriesianKiss Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol ^^
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slycooperfan Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student Writer
This is amazing! I love your writing style, it's so Jane Austen, but with a child's spark added to it. My favorite character up until now I have to admit is young Adam. He reminds me so much of my brother in looks - they both look so similar! But they are opposites. My brother is always energetic about topics and gets interested in a lot of things. Adam's reaction to how his mother was treating him just reminded him so much of my brother. This made me smile and made me relate to the character. That makes a good writer, relatable characters even thought they might be different in personality. 

I also like the Victorian details. "He tapped twice on the ceiling of the carriage with his cane and the driver beckoned the horses into motion." I don't know if this is something you made up or if they actually did this back then, but this is the kind of detail that helps me imagine the setting. I found it enthralling.

Ruth is obviously my kind of female protagonist. Lively and real. I like her very much. I can't wait to learn what really happened between Theodore and her. Gangfield is charming, as is Ruth's father. I don't like comparing characters from an original story to another one but I have to say Ruth's mother does remind me of Elizabeth Bennet's in Pride & Prejudice. I hope you are not offended by this comparison! It is a classic, after all.

I can't wait to see when the magic comes into the story. You wrote a very lovely first chapter. :)
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, no! I don't mind the comparisons AT ALL!!! :la: Tell me if this is stupid, but I'm trying to establish these familiar scenarios that we see in period stories all the time, but then I wanna turn it on its head by having the characters react differently to those scenarios. :D Plus, when I have to describe Valiard, I always say it's Jane Austen meets The Mummy. :giggle:

I've seen characters tap on carriage ceilings in a few movies, so I just used it. =P And man, oh man, I love it when a character in a story reminds me of someone I know! It always makes it so much funnier! :XD: You better go give your brother a big hug!!!!

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment! :heart: Please never hesitate to let me know if you notice anything wrong or off in the writing/story!!! :dummy: Though so far I'm just so happy you're enjoying it! :XD:

Thanks again, dear!!! :hug: :star:
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Alethearia Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Finally getting around to reading this. Amazing story. I love the characters, they're very well defined even with simple actions and dialogue. 

Gotta say, though, it reads a little more like a play than a rich detailed description of goings on. But even so, it's masterfully done. With a little work, this could easily be a real tight, professional, sell it in a freaking book store! kind of piece.
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOW! :wow: That's a massive huge compliment!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!! :glomp:

And thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It means the world to me! :heart: And I'm so glad you enjoyed it. That in itself is just, ah~ BLISS! :dummy:

Please don't hesitate to share any crits you may have. I'm keen to keep learning about writing! :D Especially when it comes to making it feel more like a novel and less like a play. I'm still struggling with prose as a whole. :XD:
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Alethearia Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, you've got the hard part down - the story that is. Everything beyond that is fluff and details that really flush out how the readers see your story. I guess the easiest thing to do is to take a really good look at the story in your head. I figure you're a visual person so this'll be easier for you than most people. Pick an image, describe every intricate detail of the image, and then eliminate the things that don't make much sense. ;) (Wink) Hope that helps... like at all? *shrugs* Shall make more comments as I read on. (Which, I shall. You have inspired me to keep working on an awesome project I gave up on a little while back.)
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GreaseZelda Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student General Artist
Dude! The drawings are super awesome! The fact that this is an illustrated novel just makes it THAT much more awesome. haha
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