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STORY SYNOPSIS
Set in 1888, The Valiard Mansion tells the story Ruth Rosewood, a middle-class Englishwoman who gets trapped inside a haunted house by a vengeful ghost.  Only one spell can set her free, and only three people believe she can still be saved—her childhood sweetheart, her best friend and her little brother. To find the spell, Theodore, Gangfield and Adam set off to traverse the dangerous past of an ancient magician, while Ruth must fight to keep her sanity in the all-consuming realm of the forgotten dead. 


Welcome to the first chapter of my illustrated novel, The Valiard Mansion! :D It's got romance, ghosts, magic and talking animals—basically all my favourite things—and it's suitable for all ages. :meow:

A new chapter is published every month or so in the format of a freely downloadable PDF. The large font size makes for easy reading on all monitors and mobile devices. Publication takes place here on deviantART as well as on the official Valiard website.

Visit www.TheValiardMansion.com/ to read the story and learn more about the characters!

:star: Any crits and comments are welcome. I'm still a newbie author and I want to learn as much as I can! Please don't hesitate to let me know what you think, okay! :w00t:

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:icondetectivegirl15:
detectivegirl15 Featured By Owner 6 days ago  Student Traditional Artist
I just finished chapter 1 :iconfangasmingplz: 
I really like it, I'm definitely going to read the next chapters. 
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much for reading! :w00t: I really hope you keep enjoying the story. :blush: :glomp: :heart:
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:icondetectivegirl15:
detectivegirl15 Featured By Owner 5 days ago  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome :giggle:
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My-Anne Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Whoa! I'm gonna read this!! Sounds amazing!!
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Ah, thank you! I really hope you enjoy it, dear!!! :glomp: :heart:
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:iconthe-viking-waterbear:
Pfft, I'm not rereading this for the fourth time, no freaking way xD 
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Pffft OF COURSE you're not. :iconohstopityouplz:

Actually, I'm really grateful you feel the need to revisit the story time and again. It's more than a compliment -- it's an HONOUR! :glomp: :heart:

Do let me know if you notice anything that's off story-wise, though. When you read something a couple of times, those questions start popping into your head like, "Why didn't Character X just do this?" or "Why isn't there a X in town?" and so on. :blush: I feel like a cad asking you for help like this, but you're free to tell me to jump off a bridge. :XD: No pressure, okay. :giggle:

Thanks again for all your support dear! :tighthug: :star:
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:iconthe-viking-waterbear:
Nono it's fine! I definitely will! You're very welcome Ez :D Hug La la la la 
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fangirl2369 Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2015
I can't find it. I clicked the link and it was just people saying how great it is :-! I wanna read it!!!
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah the PDF display on deviantArt is a bit weird. Sometimes a refresh does the trick.

Otherwise you can download all the chapters at the official website: www.thevaliardmansion.com/chap…

If you click the links on the website, you can read the chapters on your phone or tablet, so that's a bonus. :D

Thanks so much for expressing an interest. I truly hope you enjoy it if you decide to read it. :aww: :hug:
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DelpheneLightfoot Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm just starting to read this. I'm very intrigued and impressed by your characters thus far!!!!! I'm excited to read the rest!!!!!
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks so much!!! :la: You're actually reading the brand spanking new revised chapters! :D So I'm very interested to know what you think. :iconbearpokeplz:

Feel free to let me know at any point if you have any comments, input or crits. I'm all ears!! :D
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DelpheneLightfoot Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I will for sure!!!!!!!!
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riku-gurl Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Professional Digital Artist
Oh GOODNESS. (forgive any upcoming comment spam on your individual chapters, its about to happen >u>)

So I've been meaning to read this for SUCH a long time now! Its been on my to-do list and I even started chapter one a few months back, but things just kept getting away from me and now with your trailer happening, I just because so much more eager to make time for it!

I just want to start by saying that I found your characters already interesting just viewing them as sketches, now that I'm getting to know them, I love them even more-- Especially what seems like the main trio. I love Ruth and her humor and character and I really adore Gangfield's confident and perceptive seeming demeanor and Theodore (skipping ahead a bit) is just super down to earth and wonderful!

I love the characters dialog and interactions with one another and the little illustrations placed throughout are a really nice touch.
Really enjoying this so far! I love it :'D
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you so much! Truly, I appreciate your continued support. You've always been so kind and you've always commented on my drawings—I just wanna thank you, I guess. :blush: But the words aren't coming out right. ^^;

What I'm trying to say is it means a ton that you're enjoying my story now, too, on top of my drawings. :D I work very casually on my drawings, but my writing is what I pour my heart and soul into. :dummy:

Thanks so much for taking the time to read this. Please never hesitate to share your thoughts or input. I'm still very much learning the art of storytelling and any help is appreciated!!! :glomp: :heart:
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sindos Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Fav for after work read!
Sounds intriguing ;D
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Aw cool!!! I really hope you enjoy it!!! :D :D :D :hug: :star:
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Will-Kaye Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
What kind of file do you use to submit to dA? I tried submitting a Word document, but it didn't do anything like what I'm seeing up there. 
Thank you in advance and sorry to bother you, but you're the only person I've seen with this kind of file on dA. 
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's just a PDF. :meow:
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:iconwill-kaye:
Will-Kaye Featured By Owner Aug 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, that helped more than you think. I'd forgotten you could save a document as more than one kind of file XD
Shows how much of a tech whiz I am XP
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earothschild Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Student Artist
AMAZING!! I usually don't read on the computer that much, but it's totally worth it!! :)
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DemonicAngelRampage Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2014
This is absolutely amazing! I love your art style and your story. It's just amazing.
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FriesianKiss Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I don't understand how anyone could say Gangfield looks odd, he's absolutely gorgeous!  Love 
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hey, we all have different tastes! :giggle: Ruth has her type, and her type happens to be tall and messy. :meow:

I'm super glad you like Gangfield, though, of course! :la: BIG HUGS FOR YOU!!! :glomp: :star:
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FriesianKiss Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
lol ^^
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slycooperfan Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student Writer
This is amazing! I love your writing style, it's so Jane Austen, but with a child's spark added to it. My favorite character up until now I have to admit is young Adam. He reminds me so much of my brother in looks - they both look so similar! But they are opposites. My brother is always energetic about topics and gets interested in a lot of things. Adam's reaction to how his mother was treating him just reminded him so much of my brother. This made me smile and made me relate to the character. That makes a good writer, relatable characters even thought they might be different in personality. 

I also like the Victorian details. "He tapped twice on the ceiling of the carriage with his cane and the driver beckoned the horses into motion." I don't know if this is something you made up or if they actually did this back then, but this is the kind of detail that helps me imagine the setting. I found it enthralling.

Ruth is obviously my kind of female protagonist. Lively and real. I like her very much. I can't wait to learn what really happened between Theodore and her. Gangfield is charming, as is Ruth's father. I don't like comparing characters from an original story to another one but I have to say Ruth's mother does remind me of Elizabeth Bennet's in Pride & Prejudice. I hope you are not offended by this comparison! It is a classic, after all.

I can't wait to see when the magic comes into the story. You wrote a very lovely first chapter. :)
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Oh, no! I don't mind the comparisons AT ALL!!! :la: Tell me if this is stupid, but I'm trying to establish these familiar scenarios that we see in period stories all the time, but then I wanna turn it on its head by having the characters react differently to those scenarios. :D Plus, when I have to describe Valiard, I always say it's Jane Austen meets The Mummy. :giggle:

I've seen characters tap on carriage ceilings in a few movies, so I just used it. =P And man, oh man, I love it when a character in a story reminds me of someone I know! It always makes it so much funnier! :XD: You better go give your brother a big hug!!!!

Thanks so much for taking the time to read and comment! :heart: Please never hesitate to let me know if you notice anything wrong or off in the writing/story!!! :dummy: Though so far I'm just so happy you're enjoying it! :XD:

Thanks again, dear!!! :hug: :star:
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:iconalethearia:
Alethearia Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Student Filmographer
Finally getting around to reading this. Amazing story. I love the characters, they're very well defined even with simple actions and dialogue. 

Gotta say, though, it reads a little more like a play than a rich detailed description of goings on. But even so, it's masterfully done. With a little work, this could easily be a real tight, professional, sell it in a freaking book store! kind of piece.
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
WOW! :wow: That's a massive huge compliment!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!! :glomp:

And thank you for taking the time to read and comment. It means the world to me! :heart: And I'm so glad you enjoyed it. That in itself is just, ah~ BLISS! :dummy:

Please don't hesitate to share any crits you may have. I'm keen to keep learning about writing! :D Especially when it comes to making it feel more like a novel and less like a play. I'm still struggling with prose as a whole. :XD:
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:iconalethearia:
Alethearia Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Student Filmographer
Well, you've got the hard part down - the story that is. Everything beyond that is fluff and details that really flush out how the readers see your story. I guess the easiest thing to do is to take a really good look at the story in your head. I figure you're a visual person so this'll be easier for you than most people. Pick an image, describe every intricate detail of the image, and then eliminate the things that don't make much sense. ;) (Wink) Hope that helps... like at all? *shrugs* Shall make more comments as I read on. (Which, I shall. You have inspired me to keep working on an awesome project I gave up on a little while back.)
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GreaseZelda Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2014  Student Filmographer
Dude! The drawings are super awesome! The fact that this is an illustrated novel just makes it THAT much more awesome. haha
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3Fangs Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014
I simply love the fact that your story is illustrated. It adds such a perfect touch--truly, I think more ought to do so.
(It rather makes ME want to try my hand at writing again...though I haven't done so in YEARS!) :giggle:
Are you familiar with the Spiderwick Chronicles by Holly Black and Tony DiTerlizzi?
I only ask, because as illustrated stories go, they really make for quite a good read. (I imagine you'd enjoy them, certainly DiTerlizzi's art.)
Ah, back to my main comment! ^^;
I must say, this was a rather good start--a nice introduction to all of the characters...! Their personalities were each given a nice airing, so I think readers can get a good sense of who's who and where they stand. Yes, I'll admit it, Gangfield is EASILY my favorite. (There was really no denying THAT.) ;p
But I like Ruth and I think she'll make for an interesting character to read about.
Perhaps it's because I know of your desire to be in animating, and it influences my mind, but I could picture this quite clearly as an animated film...:heart:
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nope, ever heard of DiTerlizzi. ^^; I'm not much of a reader, I'm more a movie buff. :blush:

Thanks for reading!!!! I'm off to read your other comments. I hope I can reply to all of them!!! THANK YOU! :glomp:
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3Fangs Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2014
Check out his art sometime--it's worth a look. ;) diterlizzi.com/home/

Movies are just as important a story-telling medium. :nod:
I admit I'm not as much of a movie buff these days, because I lack a lot of time to be able to sit down and watch things. *siiighhh*
(I watch very few new movies, and don't even have time for my old favorites.) T_T

Aw, and don't worry if you can't reply to all my comments--I don't mind at all! :blushes:
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goldenliar1 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
amazing!
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AK-Outstanding Featured By Owner May 15, 2014  Student Photographer
Hi! I just read this part of the story (can't wait to start on the rest!) and I believe you should self publish this under Amazon. I don't quite know how to do it but I know of quite a few successful authors who self published their novels for way less money than going to a publisher and editor. Here are some of the authors, Lindsay Buroker - The Emperor's Edge, A R Ivanovich - The War of Princes, and Sarah J Maas - Throne of Glass (She was publishing her work on a writing site and got picked up by a publisher). There are quite a few more authors, I just can't list them all. XD I really hope to see this on Amazon Kindle, and I haven't even gotten to the second chapter yet! 
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Hi there! :D Sorry for the late reply. ^^; I've been a little busy with work. :)

Thanks so much for reading and commenting. :hug: I would love to self-publish this on Amazon and other places just as soon as I have enough chapters done. My only problem is I want to keep it free, and I know some platforms don't quite allow for that, so it's something I need to think about. But I'll cross that bridge when I get to it.

Thanks again. Seriously, means a ton!!! :glomp: :star:
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AK-Outstanding Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Student Photographer
No problem, I totally understand. And you're very welcome :hug:
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Melbunnie24 Featured By Owner May 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
yup. needs to be published. You get this published, I'll buy it. I'll be looking for it in the bookstore. 
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Rebel--99 Featured By Owner May 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
DUDE YOU HAVE TO MAKE THIS INTO A LIKE ACTUAL BOOK AND SELL IT. I MEAN THESE PICTURES ARE AMAZING. I HAVE READ IT LIKE 5 TIMES NOW AND STILL CANT GET ENOUGH OF IT.
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:iconthe-ez:
The-Ez Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Awwww, dear!!!! Thank you so so SO much! :glomp: :heart: That's a HUGE compliment! :hug:

Unfortunately, printing and publishing an actual book is difficult and can get quite expensive, especially if you do everything yourself. :meow:

But I'm happy to keep writing when I know I've got a lovely reader like you! :hug: Thanks again!!! :D
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Rebel--99 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
well i still think you did wonderful with the pictures and the chapters. Rainbrony okie Ene (Smile) [V7] 
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LunaMiranda Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Student General Artist
I'm really excited of starting to read this, I'm already hooked with all the characters' sketches! :happybounce: BTW, have you considered making this  a graphic novel? That would be AWESOME! La la la la 
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The-Ez Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
HEY!! :D Thanks for taking a look! :glomp: Means a ton! :heart:

I'm not fond of graphic novels—it's just not a format I enjoy reading or working on. :blush: So no, I don't think I'd ever do one. :XD:
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LunaMiranda Featured By Owner Jun 12, 2014  Student General Artist
I understand, and although I would just love to see your story in that format Woohooooo!, your written novel is an absolute pleasure to read Aww  Please keep up your amazing work!
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LilaBlack Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Read it and now I'm gonna go to sleep cause it's late, but I just wanted to say that I'm COMPLETELY OBSESSED WITH IT ALREADY. YOU. ARE SO BLOODY TALENTED. I LOVE IT SO. FRIGGIN. MUCH, I CAN'T EVEN...ASDFGHJKL
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MalbonDesigns Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014  Student Digital Artist
THIS IS GREAT!!
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princessofDisney27 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2014
AH omg! this is amazing! omg the illustrations in these are awesome too! Ah yeah! i'm going to read more! WOOT!
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EverlastingDerp Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Alright, I just read chapter one and it's great! La la la la 

Firstly, I love the illustrations you've put into the chapters. Your art is amazing so it's awesome to see you incorporating that into this story. And I love the covers aswell. Little details like that go a long way.
The synopsis made it impossibly interesting and as for the chapter itself, you've showcased your characters very well here, seriously. I have a good idea of each and every personality and have already memorized their names. Each character is just dripping with personality and individuality, especially in the dialogue where I can easily imagine a unique voice for each one.
Another thing to mention is that can I personally relate to Adam quite a bit in curtain regards so there's already a connection too. And that mystery at the end is a perfect way to keep readers wanting more. Speaking of which, off to the next chapter!
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Xsaviann Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
fOUND it! ;] Now going to read! (insted of learn... -.-') 
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