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My longest chapter yet!
Any and all input very welcome. Thanks for bearing with me, guys!
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Just a couple things! This description:
"Iron stairs led up to a high-up office in the corner and there were some old walkways hanging from the ceiling over the workshop. However, Theodore had walked on the walkways too long ago to vouch for their reliability.
He did really like his high-up office, though."
Seemed redundant as I think you said close to the same thing in chapter... Two...?
Other than that
I remembered about halfway through that I was supposed to work on my own story after the last chapter but
(unfortunately if I hold off any longer I expect to have anrgy pirate fans on my ass about it
Ohhh man this is a hard chapter to stop on, but I shall surely continue tomorrow!
One other thing though was on page 6 where you started to explain where the supply room was and you were explaining what the workshop looked like. I read it and thought it looked familiar, then I remembered that you already explained the warehouse in the last chapter and it was the same thing. I don't know if you meant to put that in there twice or if it was a mistake or something.
I hope that made sense...... But other than that the story is amazing, you're amazing!
The plot thickens!! Now we have met the character of the Mansion, if such a house may be deemed a "character", which I think in this case it surely must be.
I like that you have a limited set so far, we're not jumping around to a lot of different locations. And the pacing is still as strong, neither too fast, nor too slow.
Yes. Adam CAN be a trifle annoying at times, but that's really just his personality and age. I love how all your characters are depicted with their own unique personalities, that each differ so strongly from each other. It really makes them stand out.
Heh, I kinda feel sorry for Theodore--I'm sure Adam is hardly what he'd want in an apprentice!
Thanks for your input on Adam. I get worried that people might find him too annoying, though they should find him a little frustrating at least. Thanks so much!
As long as we're told the story NOW, we can appreciate the art LATER.
(And as I said, if readers are really dying for some character art, you have a gallery full of it!)
Personally I find you manage a good balance with Adam--he's just frustrating enough, but in en entirely believable way. It's his personality and age.
(If he weren't that way, he wouldn't be his own character, or serve the plot the way he does.)
I wonder if he'll go through any changes by the end of the story? Learn any lessons and perhaps grow up a little bit, eh?
are you confused with your career options?
the writer/artist thing?
And naw, I'm not confused with my career options. I know exactly what they are and I choose to ignore most of them. I'm going to keep doing lawyer stuff for the foreseeable future, hopefully go into litigation. It's easy money.
I love all of your characters! (I actually started reading because of your fabulous drawings)
PLEASE PLEASE write more soon!!!!!! I can't stand the suspense!!! ^_^
Are you planning to publish this story, cause you really should! (And I know a few people, including me, who would purchase it!!!)
I will! But I highly doubt you will make too many mistakes, and if you do, people won't notice! Your writing sounds very professional! AND I LOVE IT.
I noticed you have your next chapter up, so I'll be getting to that soon!!
YOURE VERY WELCOME!!!! <3
On a different note: I love the Wythert family. They made me burst out laughing, and I felt the warmth of a good family between them. (Even with Salty).
I am busting with anticipation to read what happens next! o.O
I had a fan girl squeal when I saw you had the next chapter ready. I am so excited to read it!
And just thought I would let you know, you are an amazing person. With your art skills and story telling, I am completely jealous, and also admire you.
I'm busy with Chapter 6 right now and hopefully it will be done mid to end July, so please watch this space!
Do let me know if you have any thoughts or suggestions about the story. I appreciate any and all input!
THANK YOU SO MUCH!!
I know how much even a simple comment can mean to any artist ;u;
Ee, I can't wait!
I'm really anxious to find out the details of what happened before with Ruth and Theodore!
And Gangfield is such an awesome character.
No problem at all and keep up the great work!
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment! I'm working on Chapter 6 right now and I hope to have it out by the end of July! Please watch this space!!!
And I'm finding it very difficult to picture the mansion xD Could it be possible to see a piece of artwork with the characters in the mansion? Or in front of it? (Well, you know, Adam and Theo getting closer, plus forests, etc?) I do love that we're in the mansion, though ^_^
Who's in charge of the mansion, btw? o: I wants to know!! (It'd be pretty amazeballs if the place is getting renovated for the Simmonses (or whatever their name is) o.o
So far so great, though c:
Unfortunately, the Mansion is still very much under construction. A very dear friend of mine is helping me work on its design, so hopefully we'll have something to show soon!
The person in charge of the Mansion is an independent third party, I'm afraid. Definitely not the Simmonses.
And other than that, I've still not found the time to add more drawings. Please bear with me! I promise that if I do any drawings for past chapters, I'll upload them as separate deviations as well, so you won't miss a thing!
I read the first chapter and I just couldn't stop. You are both skilled in drawing and in writing. Please continue writing. I'm absolutely in love with this story.
Thanks also for taking the time to comment! I'm super psyched to know you're enjoying my silly little story!
You can see a pic of Byron here if you like --> [link] (top left) I just don't have time in between studies to keep adding pics throughout. I'll catch up with adding illustrations in my upcoming winter break!
Thanks again! You're AWESOME!
I'm hard at work on Chapter 6, though! Please keep an eye out!
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! I appreciate it loads!!!
I'm hard at work on Chapter 6 so please watch this space!! THANK YOU SO MUCH!!
I just really want to thank you for taking the time to read and comment!! I really hope you'll like what's coming!!! Chapter 6 is coming soon, promise!
And I thought the way I ended it was rather cheap. I'd have written more, but then the chapter would never get uploaded.
THANKS SO MUCH SERIOUSLY!
Seriously thanks for bringing my attention to this. What a silly mistake to make.